A SUMMER DAY: SUNNY, WARM, iNViTiNG AM STROLLiNG THROUGH THESE FOREiGN STREETS MY FEET STiLL MOViNG TO THEiR OWN TRUE BEATS UNAWARE 'TiL iT JUMPS AT ME LiKE LiGHTNiNG
HEARTACHE, TEARDROPS, SALTY LANES YOUR LOVE, STiLL RUNNiNG THROUGH MY VEiNS
i FEEL YOU WALKiNG BY MY SiDE iT'S BEEN SO MANY YEARS STiLL MY HEART JUST KNOWS AND CLEARS A PATH TO LEAD YOU THROUGH THE TiDE
HEARTACHE, TEARDROPS, SALTY LANES YOUR LOVE, STiLL RUNNiNG THROUGH MY VEiNS
i TAKE A MiNUTE, BEiNG STiLL, NEED iT TO REMEMBER MiSS YOU, LOVE YOU, HOLD YOU DEAR EVEN DEEP iN SORROW YOUR VOiCE iS WHAT i HEAR YOU'LL ALWAYS GUiDE ME TRUE LiKE GLOWiNG EMBER
HEARTACHE, TEARDROPS, SALTY LANES YOUR LOVE, STiLL RUNNiNG THROUGH MY VEiNS
i'M SURE THERE'LL BE ANOTHER SiGHTiNG A TOAST, CAMPARi SODA OR WHiTE WiNE AND MY HEART GOES STiLL, AS i DiViNE A SUMMER DAY: SUNNY, WARM, iNViTiNG
Thank you David. As I wrote these lines I felt memories surface. They have my back and I could acknowledge my loss and love.
ben Alexander
Svenja, the line “YOUR LOVE, STiLL RUNNiNG THROUGH MY VEiNS” captures the ache of presence within absence so powerfully. Your whole piece flows like memory surfacing in waves.
~David
Bob Lynn
Well done! This poem beautifully captures the persistent nature of love beyond loss. Your refrain creates haunting musicality that anchors the emotional journey, while the circular structure – beginning and ending with that inviting summer day – offers profound comfort. The way you weave concrete details like foreign streets and Campari with abstract emotions creates vivid, relatable moments. Your unconventional capitalisation adds visual poetry that enhances the intimate, personal voice. Deeply moving work that speaks to universal human experience.
wlknlr.wolkenleer
Thank you so much for your kind words! I’m deeply moved. The prompt guide lines were intriguing and spoke to me on a emotional basis.
I’m honored you liked my piece.
Violet Lentz
As long as we speak someone’s name, or share our thoughts of them, they are never really gone. I loved this.
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Svenja, this is beautiful and relatable.
Thank you so much! It means a lot if my pieces are able to connect.
You are so welcome.
Oh, I’m looking forward to it! It sounds like fun!
hi, Svenja 😍
Just wanna let you know that this week’s W3, hosted by our beloved Kim Whysall-Hammond for the very first time, is now live:
https://skepticskaddish.com/2025/06/11/w3-prompt-163-weave-written-weekly/
Enjoy❣️
Much love,
David
A love poem in envelop rhyme! Bravo!
Thank you so much!
Thank you David. As I wrote these lines I felt memories surface. They have my back and I could acknowledge my loss and love.
Svenja, the line “YOUR LOVE, STiLL RUNNiNG THROUGH MY VEiNS” captures the ache of presence within absence so powerfully. Your whole piece flows like memory surfacing in waves.
~David
Well done! This poem beautifully captures the persistent nature of love beyond loss. Your refrain creates haunting musicality that anchors the emotional journey, while the circular structure – beginning and ending with that inviting summer day – offers profound comfort. The way you weave concrete details like foreign streets and Campari with abstract emotions creates vivid, relatable moments. Your unconventional capitalisation adds visual poetry that enhances the intimate, personal voice. Deeply moving work that speaks to universal human experience.
Thank you so much for your kind words! I’m deeply moved. The prompt guide lines were intriguing and spoke to me on a emotional basis.
I’m honored you liked my piece.
As long as we speak someone’s name, or share our thoughts of them, they are never really gone. I loved this.
Yes, they live inside of us. Never forgotten.